Published January 28, 2009
I’m falling
You catch me right before I hit the ground
I’m trapped inside and I can’t get out
You come and break the walls down
I know you think you’re my hero
Rescuing me everyday
You save my life and help me up
But I don’t want to be saved
Because its sink or swim
When you push me in
And you watch me fighting
Struggling to breathe
And when I’m about to give up
Said I’ve had enough
You jump right in and save me
And you’re the lifeline I don’t need
You’re the one who stands on the edge of the world
And says look at the view
Push me over to see how far I’ll fall
Before I call for you
And you built the four walls with no door
No sunlight, no air
Thinking that if you isolated me
I would always want you there
Because its sink or swim
When you push me in
And you watch me fighting
Struggling to breathe
And when I’m about to give up
Said I’ve had enough
You jump right in and save me
And you’re the lifeline I don’t need
And I was in a daze
I thought you hurt out of love
I thought love required pain
But now I've had enough
I see that I can't win
With someone always holding me in
So now I choose to swim
Because its sink or swim
When you push me in
And you watch me fighting
Struggling to breathe
And when I’m about to give up
Said I’ve had enough
You jump right in and you save me
And you’re the lifeline I don’t need
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It seems heartfelt, I like that. I can tell it's about someone real or a real experience.
There's a grammatical error in the last paragraph. 'Because 'It's' sink or swim'-correction.
This is Totally Wonderful! 'You're the lifeline I don't need'. Sometimes i feel that way: that i don't need a saviour. The frustration is something to which I can relate. Again-WONDERFUL.